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You need to include more insight. I want to know what you think about these issues, not only that you know they exist, although that's a good start. I want you to relate them to your own life and ask yourself how they affect you, if at all. Are you moved? Do you care? I want you to consider other perspectives on the issues and write about how they influence yours. I want you to relate them to current events. I want to know that you are doing outside research. I want you to use these issues to prove to me that you're a real person. Try to prove to me that you matter by telling me what matters to you. Tell me why these issues are important. Why should I care. Give me a reason to keep you alive. I want to see you prove to me that you're more than a mindless piece of shit breathing more than your share of oxygen. I want you to show me that you've put real thought into this.

Overall Grade: B+/A-
Good Effort.